x_battousai: (Burdens)
x_battousai ([personal profile] x_battousai) wrote in [community profile] adddictions 2014-07-18 10:22 pm (UTC)

No, it was an older one, following a string of "accidental video" posts.

While it's good that you're trying to explain what's going on in Kirby's canon updates, it still comes off as simply listing a series of events, rather than inviting others to respond to Kirby. These posts read like "Kirby's doing this, this, and this and doesn't notice people trying to interact with him." There needs to be more variation, especially kinds that will appear more inviting to other players.

For example, in the second post, you could have Kirby come across the Miracle Fruit and look at it and seem to ask the community if they think it's safe to eat. Even so, you don't need to summarize every power-up that he gets--we can safely assume that power-ups are happening and items are being grabbed. Unless it's something important in the context of the story, it's not something you have to worry as much about.

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